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06/03/2017

I lost myself 

In the maze of ways

I tried, most days,

To please you.

I tried and try

For you, my eye,

But can never fully

Appease you.

I dip and dive

And dodge these guys

To show you

I really mean to.

But I'm left behind,

Sealed and signed.

While you lie

I try to revere you.

You take some time,

Whether yours or mine,

To try things 

With other people.

When you're back in town

You come around;

I told myself

I'd leave you.

But I breathe you in..

The sweetest sin.

Your kisses, to me,

Are like needles.

I find my vein,

Inject again ..

You've got me 

Weak and feeble.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

Wonderful use of words and thoughts. Ayisha, the words are realistic and a emotional ride.
"But I breathe you in..
The sweetest sin.
Your kisses, to me,
Are like needles."
The above lines. Amazing and perfect. I understood them. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[Ayisha Upshaw]

thank you x a million!!

[Coyote Poetry]

Was my pleasure and you are welcome Ayisha..

[Alexandra W]

I love the flow and rhythm of the poem and your word choice is powerful. It really invokes strong feeling, great job!

[Contessa]

I absolutely love this. Your words, Ayisha, are so beautifully used. Thank you for this piece.

[David-Tyler]

It's the toxic people we have the most trouble cutting off. This poem hit me, reminding me of the time I was cheated on by a woman who begged me to stay with her the three times I tried to leave. I liked your word choice. I might add that I could visualize, but I didn't feel the absolute depth of the pain, but that might not have been your goal. If it was, just a little more details would have easily sufficed as this poem really wasn't awful by any means. Well penned (:

[emipoemi]

nicely constructed! I love the rhyme scheme, and the musicality flowed beautifully. Much enjoyed Well done!

[-XIV-]

This one hit close to home. Like, so much I had to pause after each break.

Thank you for this.

[Cadel]

If you'd believe it, I got chills reading the point where you give in to temptation. You have a way with words.

[Ayisha Upshaw]

You guys are really making my night tonight *tears*

[Sunwizz]

I really love this. Great work.

[Ayisha Upshaw]

Thank you is much!

[Sunwizz]

Of course, this reminds of someone i know. this really hit me.

[Wanaka]

I love this, it reminds me of a friend. Stock in a relationship that shouldn't be and mind full of sin. This is good work. The whole poem just rolls right off the tongue.

[Ayisha Upshaw]

Ahhh, I'm so happy you liked it.
Thank you!!