The ocean's allure

The smell of salt ,the ocean breeze;
quite astonishing nature,put mind at ease;
The warm sand feels softer than the snow,
the whispering waves and the sun's glow;
The turquoise sea where meets the sky,
is a piece from heaven if you look through my eye;
The trembling weeds on standing rocks,
the clouds thundered, in order to talk;
Just watching the rise and fall of the sea,
projected the calm that was meant to be.

Reviews

[Phill Oz O'fee]

Sorry missed your lovely write before (noticed written 2018) - but - soo pleased to have read it today! A great piece of wordplay and imagery. My only comment is the stanza flow - a little 'bunched together! Could I suggest revamping as follow to give a more pleasing visual interpretation:
The smell of salt
The ocean breeze
Quite astonishing nature
Puts mind at ease

The warm sand
Feels softer than the snow
The whispering waves
And the sun's glow

The turquoise sea
Where meets the sky
Is a piece from heaven
If you look through my eyes

The trembling weeds
On standing rocks
The clouds thundered
In order to talk

Just watching the rise
And fall of the sea
Projected the calm
That was meant to be.

Hope this meets with your approval

[iffi malik]

thanks for your feedback i think i might just do that