Acquaintance's Lament

A project for Language Arts class, I had to write a poem about "Death at a young age."

Once a shining star

With so much to live for

Now only a corpse

Beneath the cold ground

 

At least your eternally sleeping eyes

Will cry no more

And to the pain of life

You are no longer bound

 

And it's unfair that we're carrying

The weight of your self-inflicted crime

While you lay in a buried casket

Where you'll forever abide

 

It happened so fast

But the healing will take time

All the result

Of your sweet suicide

Reviews

[Graceful]

its so well written. you'll defently get an a plus!

[PaperHearts]

This was a really well-written piece, full of emotion and intensity. I thought that the wording of this piece was beautiful, and evoked some really strong and hard hitting emotions. Suicide is obviously a difficult issue to tackle, but I thought that you did it in the most subtle and graceful way possible. Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[momo]

how sad, yet well written on the subject. nobody ever really goes into the aftermath of one's suicide and i believe you've captured that well here. well done!