No Poetic Device.

Listen as I speak to you all for the first time..

Welcome to my mind, a discarded segment of humanities' imagination.

A stifling, putrid abyss suffering is unending here..

Dreams are compromised, by the ghosts of future pasts.

Forever it lay, so let it lie. 

Damning questions, divine answers? 

Unfortunately, I see the cards we as humans hold.

I'm calling the bluff, sitting up high upon this rocky seat.

I can see..

I can see.. 

The end is nigh.

The beast lurks in the waking misery of all who betray.

For every single imperfection, plays your own part in your melodic

self-destruction.

This small world is a tinderbox, and it's awaiting the day that we all dance simultaneously, with matches. 

I do not fear the end of the world.. 

I yearn for it, the sheer thought of comets crashing, tidal waves, to wash away.

All of the flawed designs, this world has become overcrowded with simple minded clones. 

Everything just seems to be a repeat or a convoluted, Scheme to get you to order in the next ten minutes or less.. 

I am sick of it.. 

May this world see it's colour ov its own, lies... 

its the land of the dollar bill, most humans, seem to chase that instead of the power of will.. 

All I have left to say, Is...

Lamb of God.. 

Have Mercy on us...   

Author's Note

Welcome to my mind.. Enter and pursue it at your own cost..
all unsaved changes will be lost..

Hail Hydra!

Reviews

[Robert Gluzman]

Hey man this is a sick poem! I personally like to call this style a ´F**k you´, because it literally is a slap to another persons face.

Purpose works well with the pessimistic tone here. All the abstract nouns and adjectives fit the same field and the creation of the theme (Armageddon).

"For every single imperfection, plays your own part in your melodic
self-destruction." ------ I didn´t like the close proximity of the word your, doesnt sound good. Instead it be better to say: 'plays your own part of the melodic self destruction´ In my opinion not only the rythem is better but the article strengthens the ´melodic self destruction´.

"May this world see it's colour ov its own, lies..." ----- Im guessing you ment to say ´of´ Instead of ´ov´

I agree with the poem and would have appreciated so much if you would have added how all these people who enjoy materialistic objects will have nothing to offer in the end of days. I would have added how those shiny cars and big homes wont help them and how their money will be worthless then. If you mention this then your poem will be even more powerful! Keep this up mate, I hope can learn some writing styles from you.

[Bhumika Devkota]

nice poem, I don't ever remember reading a poem like this. It is very well written