Drought within

I feel like I'm shutting down the soil beneath me drying out. Why can't I find the right words within me? Hunched head first on the floor. Begging for the wind who's knocked me down, to lift me. Always seeking answers from the roots within me. The roots who gave me life, failing me. Sunlight and water surround me and I don't know how to let it drench, seep, reach the life
The life within me.

Author's Note

Ignore grammar
First poem ever
What do you think
Any tips?

Reviews

[Sir Drift & Mr. Pulse]

Well, I see its more of a free verse, try a writing poem just to get your creativity going, to see how the words would have to match up and maybe a repeating verse that gives the poem a much stricter write. Any way. if writing a poem try to write in the format

"I feel like I'm shutting down the soil beneath me drying out.
Why can't I find the right words within me?
Hunched head first on the floor.
Begging for the wind who's knocked me down, to lift me.

Always seeking answers from the roots within me.
The roots who gave me life, failing me.
Sunlight and water surround me and I don't know how to let it drench, seep, reach the life...

The life within me."

its just easier to read like this

[Dr. YumnaKay]

It's more like prose poem. But I liked the emotions in this one which are quite well written. A sad piece.

[Stacy Purvis]

I feel it's more prose than poetry; however, it is simplistic, straightforward and elegant. I love it. Thank you for sharing!