Intoxicated

Just a draft looking for reviews to help me with my writing. Very new to this.

I can see by your smile
Your glowing inside and out
I won't pretend that I don't know
What it is

He holds you
Warmth surrounds you
Claiming every curve
He craves you
Wants you
Spellbound.

Lost
In
Your
Love
As he stares into your eyes focusing...
Intoxicated wanting more

Reviews

[Aphy!]

very seductive. Love the flow of it and i felt "intoxicated" by it too.

[alifeacoustic]

seductively purred. Very well written, getting into the flow of desire, want, intoxication. And leaving it with the word more is an excellent touch.