A love story

He was the moon
She was the ocean
And there is a story
of how the moon 
lighted the ocean
to see it's beauty
without knowing
it was only lightening
her surface without
realising she had a soul
kept in the depths of the ocean.

Author's Note

I am a beginner and I accept every critical comment.I expect your opinions on my work. :)

Reviews

[Inject Positivity]

I love how you used two natural elements to create an image of two lovers....There is a sweetness in the poem which makes it a lovely love story....Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Full ratings for the concept and your presentation.....Welcome to writerscafe mate...

[Coyote Poetry]

Beautiful. Nice ending to a amazing tale. The moon and the sea do dance a secret waltz. Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Nisreen]

Picture perfect
and quite the stunning display of this love story

[agirlwithasoul]

Thank you! I really apperciate your opinion !

[My Broken Heart]

I really like it, simple, beautiful, with depth and my mind was able to picture your thoughts. Really good job, It captured my attention and left me wanting to know more. Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem with us.

[agirlwithasoul]

Thank you! Your comments mean a lot to me!

[zombiebird]

I love the concept of this poem. I expected it to just be about the moon making the ocean feel beautiful and was pleasantly surprised by the ending. I read your other poem and I admire your simplicity and yet depth of emotion.
(As a suggestion (not that it needs it), maybe you expand on your imagery. I think there's a lot of potential in the glistening surface of the ocean and in the moonlight, and I'd love to see how you write that. Instead of using "was" and "is" words, use more specific verbs like "shine".)
Again, I love this poem, well done!

[agirlwithasoul]

Thank you so much for the great advice! I will take notes for that! :))

[Rachael Lea]

very pretty poem. Great job at producing an imagery that makes a person think

[agirlwithasoul]

Thank you !! :)

[NiteOwl]

Quite romantic, and deep, nice job : )

[goldie uttamchandani]

Such a short yet deep thought in simple words. Well done!