The Fire in my Heart

This my first attempt of poetry.

The flames in my heart reduced to mere embers;

The desire for wonder and life fade as well.

The fog filled night sky opens to reveal a sea of stars;

I long for the flames in my heart to be as bright as a star.

Author's Note

What do you honestly think?

Reviews

[VALORMORE DE PLUME]

As a first poem, this connects with your inner self, or so it seems. This is where the writer draws from their own well and expresses concepts in such a manner as to bring the reader into your world. This is a great first step.

[Neal S]

I really like this. Right to the point. This was a pleasant warm up for checking out your other stories.

[Pink Pastel]

This made feel like love and hope is still waiting and staring back at me.
wanting me to make a move

[Alice Poésy]

We all crave to burn as bright as a star, don't we? Well penned! I found it very relatable. The flames in my heart reduce to embers so frequently, it's the norm. Then I let myself look up at the sky, people I find inspiring, my favourite books, and my heart starts to flicker again as I long to burn as bright.

Great work!

[Wølfy]

I honestly think it is short, sweet and to the point. I like it.

If the flames in your heart were to burn as bright as a star then you would, besides having major heart burn, would in fact be dead.

[Howling_Wolf]

Its nice to see you Black Wolf, and thank you for the review. Your comment put a grin on my face. In this case flames are equal to passion, desire, sometimes love. I do admit that would be bad heart burn though.

[Wølfy]

Haha yeah. I know what you meant. I just like to be a smart a*s at times.

[Inject Positivity]

Dylan I think it's a great attempt at poetry, I think you did very well to create both the imageries and deep thoughts... Wishing you all the good luck for your upcoming poetry writes...


Sincerely
Dhiman

[Howling_Wolf]

Thank you Dhiman for taking the time to write a review. I might try to write poetry every once in while, no guarantee though.

[Shannon]

Beautiful and incredibly sad. That tiny ember of hope, the longing for reignition so important.

[Howling_Wolf]

Thank you S. Mi for writing a review. Even if the flame has been reduced, embers or not, it can be reignite again. With the right fuel it may become stronger or weaker from before. Think of it like a form of rebirth, like the Phoenix. I hope I haven't overcomplicated a 4 line poem?

[Shannon]

Not over complicated in the least. Beautifully restrained actually.