A mile to go

Reflections of a rainy city day

With smog

Hovering among

Crevices

Of a sleepy city  

The sun rose

From slumber

Heedful of rain

On the way.  

Soon,

As increasing showers

Diffused puddles

On shiny streets  

Birds in flocks

Flew.  

Car windshields

Clattered.  

And a lonely reveler,

Tired from the night before,

Braving every soggy step,

Could only contemplate

The last call,

The last beer,

And the girl who left

With someone else.  

Having no umbrella

And a mile to go,  

The sky

Employing harsh wisdom

Reflected his pain.

Reviews

[Einstein Noodle]

beautiful Relic! i agree with Fran 100% .. each line for me a step in the shoes of your protagonist .. i love that he walks that mile with the contrasting setting and scene .. in the rain .. alone .. closing is killer says i! wish it where something i wrote ;) poignant .. striking and subtle social comment .. love it!
E.

[Relic]

Thanks so much for your kind review, Einstein. It's much appreciated. :)

[Fran Marie]

A well crafted piece
filled with descriptive
imagery. so we'll exp3
..nice work Tim

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Fran.

[Dave Brown]

I see here the indifference of the cold concrete city and the hopeless possibility of doing anything about global warming
Great write and image

[Relic]

Thanks for your comment, Dave.

[Cori Kate]

This was beautiful! Reading it one time just wasn't enough :)

[Relic]

I appreciate your comment, Cori. Thank you.

[andrew mitchell]

Nice work Tim, one of my favs of yours. Just pure poetry.

[Relic]

Thanks so much andrew. :)

[Neville]

my back & legs came out in sympathy .. this is one of them that makes one think they are actually there .. super stuff :)

[Relic]

Thank you, Neville. :)

[Neville]

well worth it .. both you & the poem my friend .. N :)

[Relic]

.........😁😀

[Cherrie]

Well at this point the only thing left to do is a splash of the 'hair of the dog'.

[Relic]

Thank you, Cherrie. I don't know why my first "thank you" didn't post, but I'm thanking you now. :))

[Cherrie]

I've been having trouble with that as well. I think it has to do with the advertisements on the bottom of the screen. That blocks your message if you are using your phone.

[Relic]

I'm using a laptop. Hmm? Another quandry to add to the list of WC mysteries. :)

[Cherrie]

:) it was the butler in the library with a letter opener

[Relic]

hahaha. Glad you told me, I thought it was the maid in the kitchen with a pipe. :)

[Cherrie]

I never did trust that woman.

[Relic]

You shouldn't. She's young with big b***s and talks with a foreign accent.

[Cherrie]

Wee, don't forget her fuffled bloomers.

[Relic]

Never. They're an important pat of her attire. :)

[Cherrie]

I loved that silly movie

[Relic]

So did I. It's a shame about Tim Curry. He was so good too.

[Cherrie]

Yes it is I have always liked Tim from the Rocky Horror to the Muppets.

[Robert Trakofler]

I like the grittiness in the tone of the poem I have been that guy more than once LOL

[Relic]

:) Thanks Robert.

[JE Falcon]

Smooth and well spoken. I saw every moment, well done.

[Relic]

Thanks very much, JE. :)

[Chris Shaw]

The morning after the night before. The cold light of day certainly puts a different perspective on things. I guess the outcome here didn't quite go to plan. Felt both the hangover and the loneliness of this write. Great ambience Tim.

Chris

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Chris. :)