Beth

An old one.

         

Twas when I noticed Beth's good looks -

Her ample breast and thighs,

A feeling of love was in the air

That held me mesmerized.

Her silky skin bewildered me

As did each candid phrase.

But oh, how sweet the day became

When held in Beth's sweet gaze.

Were I to find another girl

I doubt she could compare

nor correspond the way Beth does

with such a lovely flair.

Author's Note

Thanks, Richard and emipoemi.

Reviews

[R.E. Ray]

Such a vivid memory recalled, and perhaps sweeter than the past, at least for some. As I've aged, I've come to treasure those memories, even more than the past moments. Sometimes our minds fill in the vacant places with good things, and I'll take that at my age. Truly enjoyed this one, Relic.

[Relic]

Thanks so much R.E.

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

such a wonderful, cute write here. nicely written

[Relic]

Thanks very much, Amy. :)

[Kesch (Finding Julia)]

not a problem.....

[ms. understood]

love is hard to get over, especially, when you are constantly comparing future partners with the past. i would be lying if i said it was easy but it certainly is possible to find love again.

[Relic]

I'm sure it is Ms. I do remember that heavy feeling in my ribs and hearing the song by Chicago called wishing you were here one time when a girlfriend left me. It's complicated I guess. Thanks for the read. :)

[ms. understood]

the worst part about break ups is the physical pain that you feel. hope everything is well now!!

[Relic]

Yeah, fine now. She wound up moving away and I haven't heard from her since. I think she left me in hopes the pain would subside by the time she left. Who knows. :)

[Rye]

love the rhyme scheme and flow, so nicely written.

[Relic]

I appreciate the visits. Thank you.

[Gee]

Hmmmm, methinks you have written flair but meant pair.
Such an easy read, flowed effortlessly from this old tongue of mine.

[Relic]

hahahaha, no, although I see your point. Thanks, Gee. :)

[barleygirl]

This poem has it all -- rhyme, rhythm, originality, & nuance of feelings floating thru each line. I love the way your expressions are dynamic, showing interactions in creative ways (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[Relic]

I appreciate your review, Margie. Thanks. :)

[Svivid]

That was cute and sensitive! You reminded us how we all have a Beth in our lives! Well done 😉

[Relic]

Thanks so much, Svivid.

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A delicate write, Relic....

Simply worded and constructed but with wonderful flow, rhyme and rhythm. Girls like Beth are special indeed. Absolute wonders for the eyes to behold.

A very romantic piece of writing. Well Done.

[Relic]

Thanks so much, Doodley. :)

[emipoemi]

There's a mystical aura about this piece that's simply captivating. And the picture adds substantially to it. I think, grammatically, the first word should be "'Twas". Other than that, well done!

[Relic]

Thank you, emipoemi.

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[Carolynn]

This is simply beautiful - so much can be revealed through ones eyes. :)

[Relic]

Thank you Carolynn. I agree. :)