What a sublime write inked with love for someone so v-e-r-y special as a gift on Valentine's Day. I love the opening verse which compares the brevity of life for cut flowers compared with human life which can lead to longevity. The third verse is outstanding. I love how the poet desires his beloved to want and need him his loving touch as much as she might need a bouquet of flowers. The final verse is very poignant and beautifully crafted. The poet tells his beloved to look for him where roses bloom because though in Spirit, he will be close to her always. A truly outstanding write, dear R... So loving, warm, tender and sweet sentiments which I simply adore. A privilege to read, dear friend. A heartfelt Thank You! for sharing...
Posted 1 Month Ago
1 Month Ago
I appreciate your comment Marie. Thanks very much.
Maybe I'm too jaded . . . maybe I read too many Valentine sentiments from men who chafe at the standard romantic expectations . . . but I do not feel this as a lovey-dovey poem at all. This feels a little stinging, in a gentle, carefully-stated way. This line seems to be at the crux of every man who resents all the Valentines BS: "In simple ways I need you to want me just as much." (LOVE this line!) And to be honest, I do not like the way women have presented our gender, as far as expectations without so much appreciation! Slap us around, baby, we deserve it (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 4 Years Ago
4 Years Ago
Thanks for the review, Margie. Yeah, I can understand your sentiments. I wrote this from an old fash.. read moreThanks for the review, Margie. Yeah, I can understand your sentiments. I wrote this from an old fashioned point of view. Perhaps, naively in a way. But here it is.
Real roses' bouquet as a gift is like perishing lives for entertaining a life.
I won't ever want that.
You just won many hearts with the last stanza. When one's away, find his/her love in things that he/she valued like none other did.
Truly profound read Sir! Be blessed!
If you fail to buy me Roses... I will sing for you...
Roses are red, my love, violets are blue...
I will look for you under the Winter Moon...
where snow blossoms become Crocus.
Seriously, your poem encompasses your
longing of soft notes where the month of June
will find you sorting out the beautiful Towne
where everyone is listening to our favorite
songs of Love. "Let me call you Sweetheart"
is one that comes to mind. truly, Pat
Very nice sentiment in this romantic Valentine's poem. The life of a rose is fleeting before it wilts and dies, but this relationship is forever. Lovely classical write Tim. Quatrains and alternate end rhyme. Well executed.