Taming the clouds of lonesomeness

When I'd found 

the warmth of your waist replaced

            by sunrise ribbons

                                      on the bed 

I felt no more alive 

              than cut grass 

                       pushed aside 

                                          by daisies...

My color 

      had drained

rains of worry 

                 fell untamed.

But for you 

      I'd rope the moon

             or lasso long sunsets.

I'd break the clouds of loneliness 

                      to saddle

                                   joyful bliss.

Content to know 

        I'd tied the reins

              of love around your heart.

Willing to ride

             the extra mile

                          it takes to get you home. 

Author's Note

Inspired by the little picture. (you can click on it).

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

it's like trying to tame the shrew.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

really like this, Relic...
reminds me of George in A Wonderful Life..."do you want the moon, Mary, I'll lasso the moon"
but we know that trying to tie someone down rarely works....we have to have that person stay on his or her own...free to leave or come back, like the butterfly...
love the layout of this....really good piece.
j.

[Relic]

Thanks, very much, J.

[Kay]

A very sweet write from beginning to end. =) I appreciate the choice of images for your posts by the way, they reflect your pieces beautifully.

[Relic]

Thank you very much, Kay.

[Kathy Van Kurin]

'Taming the clouds of lonesomeness'
Relic,
first of all the above picture says so much. I see the inspiration in the sunset's crimson longing and the moon calling the hope of love. It's very cool to see the old fashioned look of a cowboy actually lassoing the moon. You used some fun word play...first line 'the warmth of your waist replaced by sunrise ribbons' and line three, 'my color had drained rains of worry fell untamed' I find it fun and interesting to read people's very early stuff just to see how a start was made in writing.
This was lovely!
Blessings,
Kathy

[Relic]

I appreciate your review, Kathy. Thank you.

[Nipplegrinder]

This is just so, lovingly rendered. So simple, so touching. That said, your vocabulary is impressively displayed, and page presentation is very inviting to the reader. Well penned, my friend.

[Relic]

Thank you for saying that, my friend. :)

[andrew mitchell]

yes to have that someone special is precious while loneliness tears one apart.

[Relic]

It does....thanks. :)

[Priscilla Sayers]

Beautiful
And everyone wishes for someone to feel that way for them.

[Relic]

I'm sure they do. Thanks.

[L.C. Jarrette]

wow...if my boyfriend would make me a poem as beautiful as this, i would marry him immediately.haha! it's just so romantic.

[Relic]

Thank you. :)

[Katerina Grev]

Fantastic job, I love the symbolism and description, the poem has such an effortless and breathtaking flow, it is wonderful.

[Relic]

I appreciate your thought Katerina, thank you. :)

[Alfred Kukitz]

This is WOW II. Your lines dream of a romance with the soul. Oh what a tickle!

regards,
al

[Relic]

Thank you. :)