Committed

So I'm thinking this is it

That maybe my story is over

And maybe if I die

No one will even notice

It'll be like I never was

It'll soon be a normal thing

No one will grieve

And no one will remember

The b***h I once was

That b***h I still am

But maybe once I'm gone

You guys will soon understand

The reason I did it

The reason I committed

I'm not happy here

No, I never have been

I'm miserable inside

Can't you hear me screaming?

Can't you hear my crying?

Can't you tell I'm dying?

Maybe I'm not supposed to be here

It's what my head tells me

But my heart says it isn't yet my time to go

Honestly though, I think you're all

Better off without me

So maybe I should do it now?

Maybe I should really commit

Don't think I'm serious?

You haven't seen the worst of me yet

Seriously though

You say I'm all drama

But in reality you know it's all on you

You called me names behind my back

And I kept all my feelings inside

Never letting you see my hurt

Never letting you see my tears

Tonight I'll cut myself again and again

And tomorrow there will be more burns

Even shortly after that

I won't be in this world

You'll regret what you said

And wish I was back in your world

But I won't be coming back

I'll be long dead by then

I'll have been committed

Reviews

[Michaela Briggeman]

OMG this is amazing. exactly what i feel...sometimes. ive thought about stuff like this so much. this is the first piece to pinpoint the raw emotions one feels. its harshly beautiful and the word choice is perfect!!

[Princess3Morag]

Wow, I really like this. The parts that rhyme, what you are saying, the short sentences that make the long poem..It's like a small story and I liked reading it :D Messages are best spread through stories and poetry.

[watch_the_world]

:(

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a sharp and poignant reminder of the damage done to vulnerable minds...that words can heal and hurt.