Crazy as it sounds...

 

When I heard you'd moved to an uncharted island,

in the middle of the Atlantic ocean,

I hopped on a hellecopter,

and sought out your warabouts.

When I finally found you,

you were all alone,

on that deserted island.

Crazy as it sounds,

I did whatever it took,

to have you back in my life.

 

When I heard that you were scooba diving,

in the gulf of mexico,

I  got on my boat,

and searched for your boat for hours.

When I finally found you,

you were surfacing the water,

and I pulled you back aboard.

Crazy as it sounds,

I did whatever it took,

to see you again.

 

When I heard that you were somewhere in Japan,

I got on a plane,

and looked up your hotel on my laptop.

When I finally found you,

you were drinking green tea,

and wearing a kimono.

Crazy as it sounds,

I did whatever it took,

to be with you once again.

 

When I heard you were with another woman,

I got in my car,

and drove to your apartment.

When I finally found you,

You were sitting on your couch,

and kissing the girl that you were cheating with.

Crazy as it sounds,

I stopped doing whatever it took,

and I dumped you.

 

The end,

of us.

 

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

An interesting concept! I thought that this was captivating, original, and well-executed. I loved your choice of words, and thought that it added a real sense of magic to the imagery that you were creating. There were a few mistakes in terms of spelling/grammar which I found to be quite distracting, and I thought that the ending was slightly weak for the rest of the poem, but other than that, I enjoyed this poem! :)
~PaperHearts

[Ki]

this is a very good and creative write!

[Harley Ann]

another good one! i hate the thought of someone giving up on the person that would do anything to be with them, to make them happy, and throwing it all away just by cheating. its like...cant you at least do the honerable thing and break up with her first??
whatever. boys suck. but this poem is brilliant.

[Rae]

That was a great poem. The ending is what made me laugh because that's what he gets. By the way, there are a few spelling errors like "helicopter", "whereabouts" and "scuba". :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

I think this was a good poem. I would love to smack the crap outta a guy who cheated on me. I would dump him too. Thanks for sharing. :)

[nono]

Really nice I like the ending the most. Nice job!

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brilliant ending, didn't see it coming.. wonderful cutting end.

[Keevan]

lol awesome. But just so you know, guys don't wear kimonos. only girls do. and not that often. But still, good poem.

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Wow.. This was a sad tale, but the devotion stemming from the love was absolutely beautiful. It is a shame to see such emotion go unappreciated.