Adventure unfolds

 

Once apon a time,

You were falling asleep,

and the monsters came out,

from under your bed,

such as dragons,

and sharks,

and giant octipusses.

But then,

You slayed off the dragon,

and ended the shark,

and killed the octipus.

But then,

You were riding the waves,

on a pirate ship,

and captain hook made you walk the plank.

But then,

You were in the jungle,

and tarzan was swinging from vine to vine,

like a monkey,

and you happily joined him.

But then,

you sword fighting with the enemy,

and you stabbed him with your blade,

and he died in dignity.

But then,

You were in a magic forest,

surrounded by fairies,

and elves.

But then,

You wolk up,

from a fantastic adventure dream,

unfolding.

Reviews

[PaperHearts]

What an awesome poem! This poem was packed with imagery, which I thought was a real highlight of this piece. I liked the fairy-tale child-like aspect of this write, and the way it seemed to burst with colour and imagination. This definitely needs some proof-reading, but the concept was original and creative! :)
~PaperHearts

[Harley Ann]

gah! minus fifty million points for having any relation to adventuretime!
but otherwise the poem was pretty good. perhaps an excessive use of the phrase "but then," nut good nonetheless lol

[Rae]

That is one wicked dream. I would love to have one of them. I found two little spelling errors. You said "You wolk up..." I think you meant "You woke up..." and you spelled "octopus" and "octopuses" wrong, but other than that, I loved it and it was great. I just love Adventure Time too. :)

[nono]

I love it, i still like to dream about all that stuff. It's nice to make a place where you can just get away from everyone. Your own fantasy world. VERY NICE IT'S AWESOME.

[Keevan]

LOL ADVENTURE TIME!!! :D I love your poems! They're fun :)

[Anonymous]

Ad-venture Time! :D
I don't feel very review-y, so I'll give you this: Nice work, I enjoyed the story of this poem.
Keep writing!

_M.C.