Was I wrong?

 

Whenever you smile,

it's from the heart.

Whenever you leave,

it tears me apart.

Whenever you cry,

it makes me sad too.

whenever your troubled,

it makes the world blue.

 

Was I wrong?

Were you for real?

did all these sad things,

just sighn off on our deal?

they say that your perfect,

I told them they're right,

but ever since I met you,

I can't sleep at night.

 

You told me your worries,

you held onto my hand,

you took me to concerts,

by my favorite band.

But the time that you kill with me,

seems awfully fake,

and you won't even kiss me

for heavens sake!

 

Was I wrong?

Were you for real?

Did all these sad things,

just sighn off on our deal?

They say that your perfect,

I told them they're right.

But ever since I met you,

I can't sleep at night.

 

Now I'm closing the door,

and walking away,

I'm sorry to say this,

but I can no longer stay.

It pains me to say,

that your love is not real,

but even so,

my heart you did steal.

 

Was I wrong?

Were you for real?

Did all these sad things,

just sighn off our deal?

They say that your perfect,

I tell them they're wrong.

Because the love you once gave to me,

is surely now gone.

 

Author's Note

This is pretty good, if I do say so....

Reviews

[nono]

This is really good. Me i'm not good at rhyming. But i love this poem. And I really mean that.

[ForTheWorld]

oh i love it....its better if this poem would turn into a song...i would like it more..

[Keevan]

i really liked this. you have nice rythem and rhyming skills (both of which i do NOT have!) I envy your writing. Nicely done! Good poem!

[The Lone Wolf Prose]

This has a very song lyric feel to it. I like the repetition of the stanza "Was I wrong?" it gives piece this almost cyclical feel to it that makes me feel as if I am inside the writer's thoughts. Keep working!

Minor spelling errors:
sighn - sign
*First stanza: "whenever your" should be "whenever you're"