Crush

 

Cherish

I cherish you

I cherish everything about you

 

Lust

I lust for you

I feel it so much, it hurts

 

Care

I care about you

I never want you to get hurt

 

Need

I need you

without you, I would be nothing

 

Friends?

Why do you want to be friends?

Am I not good enough?

 

Lovers

We should be lovers

In love with one another

 

Love

Love isn't just kissing

and holding hands

 

Love

Love is much more then that

love is the feeling I get when I see you

 

Love

Love is the special someone in your life

whom you care about very much

 

Friends?

you still want to just be friends?

I didn't think you were that stupid

 

Love

love is not a game

so I guess I'll just go

 

Bye

 

I love you

 

But I have to go

 

So, bye.

 

 

Author's Note

I wrote this for a very special someone in my life. I wrote it for my crush! I do'nt think he wants to be more then friends though, "Sigh". Well, anyways, this is for him.

Reviews

[Loveholic]

this is really nice. I noticed how you used love many times, and i would've done the same. Love is constantly being described and defined differently, so it's good that you said a lot of what you wanted to say about it :)

[The Perfectionist]

It's rare I see a poem in an actual poetic form, so I was pretty happy when yours started off that way. Four stanzas in, I had only two complaints (that you used cherish one too many times, and that the last one should have been 'I would be nothing without you')

Then...then I got to the rest of the poem. And I was sad. Oh, how I was sad. This is a personal poem and you clearly poured out a lot of emotion into the rest of it, but I wish you had managed to do that without having the form degenerate into a total mess. I liked the system you had at the beginning; way to get my hopes up and take them away XD

As it stands, it's extremely emotional, but it really could use some tidying up. By the way, you have several silly spelling mistakes. I'll outline what the correct form is here:

whom
didn't
isn't

[Keevan]

Very cute K.M.!!! It was awesome!!!! WHO'S YOUR CRUSH????
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