Follower

     If you ever find another lover,

I will follow you while under cover

 

And when you travel near, and far,

In a train, or in a car

 

I will follow you through thick and thin,

if I did not, it would be a sin

 

My love for you is much too deep,

my head is full, my heart is weak

 

for the blade of love hath stabbed my heart,

as long as I am here, we will never, be apart.

 

 

Author's Note

It took me 5 minutes to write this poem! I hope you like it! I personally think it's good. But what do I know. well anyways, no ratings please, only reviews.

Reviews

[Kia-chan!]

Ohhhhhhhhhhhhhh! I'm so sorry! when I wrote this I did'nt know how to spell "heart"! I'll fix that right away.

[PaperHearts]

I really liked the honesty behind this poem, and thought that the rhyming flowed really well. Although I suppose this poem could be interpreted as being quite dark and heavy, I thought that the fact that you decided to make it a rhyming poem added a certain lightness and balance to it. The third line should be "I will follow you through thick and thin", and you have misspelt 'heart' in the last and second to last stanza. :P I loved the last four lines! Nice work,
~PaperHearts

[Keevan]

that's pretty good K.M. To me, the rythem was a little off, but it was still a good write. try editing it and taking out or changing some words to make the rythem fit better.
Again, Nice Write,
J.J.