A Ghost Dance

A poem about a man saw his ghost girlfriend dancing ballet in a graveyard.

I stand in a graveyard looking at my girlfriend gravestone,

I send my flowers of red roses on her stone.

She used to be a beautiful ballerina dancer,

She died by a heart attack.

In my dreams I see her dancing in next to me.

I miss her smiled as she stared at me.

I close my eyes crying over her grave.

I open my eyes as I see the sky turning darkness

I see smokes of fog passing by her gravestone.

I see her dancing like she a ghost through the fog.

I called for her but she can’t hear me.

She kept on dancing as she came near me.

My eyes were in tears of joy when I saw her.

I told her to don’t leave me.

As soon she was done dancing,

The fog disappears and she was gone.

I will never forget her  dance.

Author's Note

Her music

Reviews

[Ice QueenJen]

I feel like this was a fond memory that you envisioned in your mind. I know someone who went through this very thing, yet can't seem to bring himself to visit her grave. Great writing too.

[JRB]

ok got me thinking

[ur_ginger_girl]

pretty good

[Eric Cox]

Sad and touched with beauty. An excellent piece. Nice work!

[Matthew Smith]

I'm seeing a lot of potential in your writing (this and Doll Shop, specifically), if only you could get over some very basic grammar problems. Obviously your heart is where it needs to be, but your words are struggling to catch up.

Don't take it personally. You do have some really good things going on, though. From one horror fan to another, good job.

[Patches I'm not so new..]

This is a telling poem you are telling me you are not showing me a poet should show the reader what is happening in the poem. This is a good start IMHO but it could be so much better

[Magdelena]

I so love how you bring forth horror with a hint of romance hidden inside.. Takes a great writer to do that. Your pieces always thrill me to no end, for your imagery is quite exceptional you know.. This was a piece of art, and the music you brought forth with it was perfection..

Mags xx

[Shalini Dinesh]

I wonder how you can come out with so many horror writes, i will faint the moment i see a ghost in front of me...

[OT]

this was a very bittersweet and poignant write!! a sweet ode to someone passed, with a dark hint to it too, very nice!!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a very sweet poem and it was bittersweet. I think he was able to see his girlfriend's dance was lovely. Good write. Thanks for sharing. :D