Blood

My first haiku poem

Blood covered your body.

Death steals your soul.

Now you pass away.

Author's Note

I think I did it right lol, it's my first.

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

You said it all in three lines. That takes great talent. When death come for you. No way back. A excellent haiku.
Coyote

[Star Wolf]

Just like a brilliant crimson scream!!! Hey, nice job on this!

[Undying Glory]

great work man. short, but sends chills down the reader's back. i found this really nice. awesome

[The Fatal Lover]

Wow. I loved it. Great job. *Sniffs* I smell blood now =P

[Eric Cox]

Cool horror haiku. Paints a dark picture.

[Tina Kline]

That's rather dramatic, just like coming across a very obvious splash of blood! I do like it!

[Black Cat Fever]

Wow! That's like a fist in the face type of poem. Blunt and to the point. It does make quite the crimson splash. However, a haiku is 5-7-5 syllables. I don't think you'd have any problem rewriting this to fit that rule at all!

[zombiikillah666]

whoa. (:
kewl...kinda haiku...
yay for haikus!!

[RTB]

i never was one for haikus haha but it was good i think u did it rite too honestly it was a good haiku

[A.Lee]

I actually really like the poem. I think its very excellent imagery and feel. However, to make it a haiku it should be 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second, and 5 in the last. You have 6-4-5. Almost got it though.