Desert

This poem is about a lonely scared man in a hot desert.

 I stand alone in a deep sand.

The sun burning my skin.

It feels like I am in middle of nowhere.

I begin walking as fast as I can,

The sun burning my eyes.

I am surprised they cannot find me.

Ah god, my skin is peeling off from the heat,

It’s beating me to death.

I must get out of here.

I called out, "Help! Help!"

No one heard me.

Sand dust covered my legs.

My throat started to get dry,

I need water, so I can survive.

Now snakes jumped out of the sand.

They came near me,

as they started biting my legs.

I started to use my legs to push them out of the way.

I tried my best to run away from them.

   It feels like I am living in a hot coffin filled with sand.

The fear of my life will never be the same.

My day in this desert will never be forgotten.

                  

Author's Note

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

The story of the desert is amazing. Thank you to the U.S Army. I spend years in the desert. Your story is true. The heat and the snakes/spiders are the enemies. Many a days we changed our path for the snakes have the right of way in the desert. A very good story.
Coyote

[George Love]

You hit it well out of the park this time. Nicely done.

[ur_ginger_girl]

cool poem the desert could be killer

[Blake Blackstone]

Very nice. The desert can really be a killer...

[Frifthor (D^2)]

Your imagery in this piece turned out nicely, giving us a nice look at the desert. I wasn't sure how the track fit in on the first read, but I slowed down a bit on the second one and got into the feel. I liked the lack of rhyming through the piece, as it seemed to allow it to flow a bit more and allowed you to express a greater amount of freedom. Good work once again.

[Poetic Beauty]

There is great description to this story you have woven upon this paper for all to read.

[Loner]

U are a gifted writer.

[Ashley.M.E]

this is really good, well done.

[Senseless whatever]

Very good write. Great visuals and good expressions of fear and being alone and lost.

[The Fatal Lover]

I love that poem. Great job. It's really great. =)

[Tate Morgan]

That would teach us the value of life