Death

A poem about my grandma that pass away few years ago. I miss her ;(

I see her laying on her bed,
I stared at her eyes all red.
I feel her heart stop beating,

Then tears pour from my eye,

as my mom opens the door, seeing me cry.
She saw her laying on her bed dying.
I told my mom, “It seems like she is dead.”
Death appearing in her house.
It came to take her away.
Her life will never be the same,
as she checks into heaven on this day.

Author's Note

I wish she was here still alive right now. :(

Reviews

[Sean M. Addams]

very deep and emotional piece but very touching too..nice work!!

[An owl on the moon]

I can relate so well to your write.. there is such a feeling of loss.. I lost all my grandparents by the time I was in my early 20s... Your poem helps us connect to that sense of sadness...

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Aww this was really sad. Good job on it though.

[Hippy]

i like it its very sad and a great write but me i would re do the last two or three lines i feel you coulda done better if you would like to know what i would put go ahead and ask. atleast redo the last line it bothers me so

[deeps]

Sad but yet touching write.

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

i'm very sorry for your loss:(

[Star Wolf]

I wanted to cry too. I can feel the pain and loss in this.

[Tina Kline]

A very touching, sad and tender poem. It made me want to cry thinking of the people who have died in my life that I still love.

[Coyote Poetry]

A lighter dark poem for you. Children can see more then us. Death is one of my favorite character. A very good story. Thank you.
Coyote

[James Watts]

Nice dark poem. Pretty creepy.