Ugly

A poem about suicide

 I stand on the beach sand looking at the brightening sun.
People look at me like I’m an ugly beast.
It seem like everyday they stared at me all frightened.
They see my eyes all red,
Sometimes they wish I was dead.
Why are they scared of me?
They circle around  in front of me, as I stared at the sky.
They see my tears as I start to cry.
In their thoughts they are calling me ugly.
I give them their wish for me to die,
 I pull out my gun and shoot my head while I cry.

Author's Note

Sorry I'm just very depressed, but don't worry I wont kill myself. I have my whole life a head.

Listen to this sad music while you read the poem. :(

Reviews

[ms. barrie]

sadness breathes life to creativity. each line leaves you with that aching emptiness, of loneliness and despair (we've all been there.) a very good write,you have again: the rhythm and flow... very descriptive in such few lines.

[SmileBig :)]

So sad, but it is a good write.

[ur_ginger_girl]

Cool poem I understand I`ve wrote poems like that when I`m pissed too but its good

[Aisha]

This was very well-written. I'm not always a fan of rhyming, especially when it comes to dark matters, but you pulled this off well.

[Aline S. Iniestra]

Wow, that was beautifully depressing. So much melancholy in it and the imagery was poignant. Loved it! Excellent job. That's the way to let things out. :)

[Vanna Renee]

Wow.
This is... depressing.
You... should've gone deeper though, Hon.
Go further then red eyes,
Tell the reader cryptically why his eyes were read from tears, from hate, distaste.
Make the rhyming more whimsical but puttery

[HopelesslyDevoted]

this is so sad.... i have felt like this more and more lately. just remember there is always someone out there that loves you and doesn't want you to die, even if they haven't said it.

[Calypso]

I'm sorry you feel this way. There is one thing you can hold to though, you're a good writer.

[Blake Blackstone]

Nice poem. short.. simple... any one can relate to it. It makes for a great poem. I remember being in drama class and having to memorize a whole f*****g Edgar Allan Poe poem...It f*****g sucked. Keep em short the drama students! Haha

[Dinesh Sairam]

A very different poem. It's splendid and portrays the emotion really well. As Marcie said, ugliness is on the inside. Just one thing - the ending was all too quick. Well, it's nice after all. And I'd like to quote something here..

"If you have the guts to die, try living" ~ Author unknown :)