Fear

Warning: This poem is super scary. It's about a ghost in a hospital

As I stand alone in this hospital,
I look at myself in a mirror nothing but skin and bones.
I remember being so old,
I feel so cold and lonely.
Why am I here?
I walk in the dark hallway calling for nurses.
“Help! Help!”
Nurses fear me as they can’t see me,
They hear me calling, “Help! Help!” again.
I went near them as they pass me.
What is wrong with me?
Why do I fear them?
Am I dead?
I remember my head bleeding,
As I lay down in my bed.
What happen to me?
Why every time I see them, they can’t see me?
I see demons coming for me,
Some of them want to drag me in hell for all eternity.
I hide in this man room in the hospital,
I see him laying on his side.
I started to fade away,

Before more people will fear me in this day.

Author's Note

This poem also give me the chills when I wrote it. How about you?

Reviews

[Tristan Noir]

i was one of the nurses =)

[Eric Cox]

This has a very chilling feel to it. Great job on this creative and haunting write.

[Frantzuu]

I love stuff like that lol
I love the feeling of fear, great poem dark and creepy in a good way :D

[Holly-Marie]

You did a really good job of taking something scary (a hospital) and making it even scarier. The feeling of helplessness was over powering here. Great write =)

[Zeitgeist Manifesto]

Hospitals are naturally creepy. You chose a perfect setting. I really like the way you used the contrast of everything. Nurses running away from a person who needs help. Thats rich. This poem made me look over my shoulder. lol.

[QuietPoet]

It was creepy. it had nice detail and i pictured it in my head. I liked it.

[George Love]

Much better grammatcially, no typos so nothing distracts from the work itself and you picked a great picture to go with the work as well. Nicely done!

[Poetic Beauty]

This is a creepy poem. the details are great.

[TamiViolet]

It is indeed creepy... I enjoy the creativeness of the work and that graphic does a fine job of enhancing horror-inducing images.... It would be horrible for one's cries to be unheard.... Your work has a 'Poe' feel to it, especially the last two lines...
And yes, it gave me chills!

[Deaths Cold Kiss]

love the write, and the pic!!!