Darkness

One of my old dark poem. I wrote this one because one of my ex girlfriend was being mean to me.

I am in the chamber of darkness
The demons torture me with sadness
I see nothing but tears going down my face
They're taking me a way from this earth with out a trace
Everyday I feel nothing but insufferable pain
Even though its not the same
They came to take me a way
In this darkness I should stay

Reviews

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

It was good. It doesn't scare me. It just makes me feel sad. :(
It was still amazing though.

[The Water Queen]

morbid and scary. Induces thoughts of what they are. Great poem.

--The Angel of the Earth--

[TamiViolet]

I feel the dark emotion in this piece. I like the use of 'they'...adds mystery and excitement that spirals although I'm sorry your girlfriend made you sad...

[Jessica]

morbid in a good wayy

[Sean M. Addams]

i liked the darkness in this piece alot... very well expressed..overall nice job!!!

[deeps]

This is excellent, I really enjoyed this piece

[Eric Cox]

Very nicely penned poem. Sad and so creatively done. Excellent write.

[brownie]

"The demons torture me with sadness"
My favorite line in the poem.
Keep on writing great dark poetry!

[123456789]

This explains so much, but leaves all of the details so vague. Very interesting writing, in a good way. I like this! Good job!

[Tina Kline]

The pain comes through on this strongly. I love the word choice you use to get the hurt and pain across. Fantastic job on this.