Darkness

One of my old dark poem. I wrote this one because one of my ex girlfriend was being mean to me.

I am in the chamber of darkness
The demons torture me with sadness
I see nothing but tears going down my face
They're taking me a way from this earth with out a trace
Everyday I feel nothing but insufferable pain
Even though its not the same
They came to take me a way
In this darkness I should stay

Reviews

[Star Wolf]

An awful bout of depression. I hope it soon faded away. I like your poem though, it sure captures the essence of the pain you were experiencing.

[The Analog Kid]

Very haunting. Nice and compact.

[Hippy]

a way should be away and id personally like it if that line with away was slightly shorter to help flow but it has some cool imagry and metaphors a chamber of darkness, demons torturing with sadness its interesting

[Fran Marie]

Creepy dark ....nicely donE!!

[Jonathan De Elvira]

it's a story about one person hoping to be saved...even though the chances is too thin but hey that's what most people wants right?

[Frantzuu]

Creepy, pain, hell, I can see the imagery. Freaking epic piece man! :D

[Matthew Kult]

Hello Ira,

Into the depths of Darkness surrounded by torture and pain. How sweet the suffering must be. The eroticism of the pain itself. Sounds like a field day to me. Good work.

Regards,

Matthew

[Nicaushio Yamaki]

In darkness their're times of death, for demons torture comes in despare. To lead to is always in dismay. When they found the vessel they saw he was as it were dusks in the air. when the little weeping soul profuonds his labor away thou no one answer unto his lore

[Coyote Poetry]

In the darkness many of us may go. To be torture and drowned in sadness would be a good place for many in this world. I like the poem. I could feel the sadness and darkness in your words. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[~lost and in my fantisi..]

wow! very good! there is lots of emotion! ...nicely done