Time

Random thing xD just came up with it on the spot

One o'clock

Two o'clock

Three o'clock

Four 

Find yourself washed up onto the shore

Just knocked out but you'll never be sore

Because with every moment opens another door

and in the future there will be many, many more

Five o'clock

six o'clock 

Seven o'clock 

Eight

with every passing moment weaves new fate

waiting, all you have to do is open the gate... 

Reviews

[AndyJCash]

I feel a sort of dual meaning to this: the first could be that through opening doors we progress as people, the second being that this poem is about the journey of life to death, washing up on the shore being birth and opening the gate being symbolic of the gates of Heaven. For that reason I love it. Nothing better than a poem with multiple meanings.
Also have to mention the fun structure, playful and childish, maybe linking to our naivety of not realising how fast time goes by. Great poem!

[Omar Fendri]

meaningful... depends a very vast imagination and deep thinking. I like the way your words are organized, they slipped in a very beautiful gradual way. An optimistic ending based in an important prudence and wisdom.
beautifully written... adore it

[Yina]

I love the way this reads kinda sing-songy:) It's really good and I agree with AndyJCash about te meanings. It's really good:)

[.......]

I like this it's very catchy.
Very nicely written

[Enigma]

Wow. Catchy rhythm. Nice write! :D

[Barbara H.]

You've used a very basic "tick-tock" chant to point up the important message that when one door closes another opens. Message of hope. Hope keeps one breathing!

[dreaming dame]

Really great. :) I love the rhythm. :)

[ब्र&#..]

I definitely like the rhythm of the poem great job, excellent read!
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-Me