Witch's Brew

A Halloween Poem

 

I concocted up a love potion -

a simple one for you.

I threw in thyme, a little sage,

and something sticky and blue.

 

Heated over a willow fire,

it began to simmer and foam.

Lightning flashed outside the door.

The room was dreary and gloam.

 

From the wicked smell it seemed to me,

the tonic was nearly done.

Giggling, I poured it in the jar.

Soon, I’d have you on the run.

 

I put a ribbon around the lid

and packed it in a pretty bag.

One sip was all that it would take

to make you love this ugly hag.

 

But when I knocked on the front door

the giggling from within

told me Mildred, from down the road,

had beat me there again.

 

 

Reviews

[Big ol' Kahuna]

Nicely done. What a special time of year; one of the best holidays! And for such special reasons!!!

I liked the rhyme and the flow, good job. "Heated over a willow fire,it began to simmer and foam" was my favorite line, and that really gets strong images going for me.

I guess you should have just went back to the cauldron, cranked out a double batch, headed back over there, and slipped them both a mickey. Kind of see what happens next! Now that would be an interesting Halloween poem! Yeow! Talk about your witches sticking together! :) Ha, just kidding.

Good job lady.

[Baz]

Nice one, Honeypot. I like the punchline at the end. (And to top it all off I learned a new word. Had never heard "gloam" before.) Very clever, witty, and entertaining!

[Samuel Dickens]

That darned Mildred! I was rooting for you. Such disappointment! Great rhyme and rythym, Honeypot. It made me grin.

[Nix]

Hey lovely, sorry this took a bit longer than planned. I've just read through this again, its such a clever, funny, imaginative poem with perfet rhyming! I really enjoyed this one. :) x

[nora]

Haha, this is so fun! The reader can tell that you had fun writing it, and it definetly got a laugh from me! The rhyme scheme was great and it flowed nicely. Great write :)

[Kayla]

This is so cute! I can tell that you had fun with this, and I love the twist at the end. Very nice rhyming and structure; the classic halloween poem with a twist. I especially love the last two stanzas...Nice write.
Thank you for commenting on my poem!
Awena

[Sean Allen]

Ah, 'tis Halloween and I got to read your lovely poem on the day it was intended.

[-WolfReaper (NERV)]

My friends find it hard to make me smile, let alone laugh - But you've done both with this piece.

Well done!

[Bare trees]

HAHAHA, That was really good. The meter was a little off the first time through, but when I went back I heard it a little better. I liked the fact that you made it like a little story that had funny ending. The rhymig was good too. I liked this a lot. Good job.

[Tony]

I guess all you witches stick together, HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA!!!!!!!!! This was cute and clever. This paragraph is quite funny. It made me laugh.

From the wicked smell it seemed to me,the tonic was nearly done.Giggling, I poured it in the jar.Soon, I'd have you on the run.

Now you have inspired me to write something on this subject. Thank you

Antony