Skinny Dipping Haiku

This is a Haiku series about...skinny dipping.

 

All day I waited

Finally the sun went down

And I snuck outside

 

Near the water’s edge

Pausing to look around me

Alone in the dark

 

Crickets invited

So I started to remove

Clothes that clung with sweat

 

With a sigh I dove

Beneath the cool dark surface

Smooth relief at last

 

Floating on my back

Gazing up at twinkling stars

What could be better?

 

 

Reviews

[The Scanners See Sound]

Doesnt a haiku 'anthology' of sorts, defy the essance of haiku?

From what I understand, a haiku is meant to capture a moment in it's purity; not tell a story.

Simply because of the fact that it took you 5 haiku to tell what should have taken one, seems to be counter-intuitive.

This is an entertaining poem, but not an effective haiku I think.

[Shadow Writer]

Well done. Enjoyed the string of Haiku. Phantom....

[Melissa Kesead]

Reminds me of skinny dipping as a kid. It always felt so good. Thanks for sharing!