My Luck

Short poem, simple words and vocabs used.

F**k you to hell.
Can't you just,
Let me be?
I'm about to break that bell.
You better stop ringing it.
You make me feel that I don't
F*****G FIT.
Everything you try to do
To fix me up
BREAKS ME THE F**K DOWN.
That repulsive frown,
On your face,
Does not scare me.
When can I leave this place?
So, tonight my pace goes up.
Lemme hear you gulp.
Then again, what the f**k
Am I trying to do?
I always come to realize
That, what truly sucks
is my luck.

Author's Note

Review please.

Reviews

[Rikkevi Rue]

usually an angry write loses its sense of aesthetic articulation. What is impressive is that while the emotion flares, the cold icy control of hardcore b***h never falters... If you were venting, then not bad. If you were painting from the easel of life's emotions, then MASTERFUL.

[Deviant Works]

The opening line to this was absolutely flawless, Roxanne. It was blunt emotion that hit hard and kept me reading with my jaw clenched. "I'm about to break that bell. You better stop ringing it." Pure aggravation. Broken down, at your end, full of rage...but then you closed this with pain, disappointment, almost as if you just sagged to the floor. I loved this... I felt everything. And I completely understand the last two lines.

[Calypso]

So full of pain.

[Madison A. Wright]

wow... awesome.. tell em off!! Nothing like trying to please someone that you can't... in the end its the other person that needs the help.. one can only love when they learn to love themselves... thanks for the share!!

[Jeff]

Very honest and emotional!

[Janice Ann]

Honest. Raw and sort of a slap in the face to read! I wouldn't change a thing!

[Coyote Poetry]

Last line is my problem too. Wasn't for bad luck. I wouldn't know I was alive. The emotion in the words were strong and powerful. Some days better to stay in bed or try to find a place to rest and think. A excellent poem. Thank you.
Coyote

[GrandDystopia]

Wow, this was so angry i thought my computer was gonna punch me in the face.
A really good piece of work, nice job:)

[Miles Evens]

Cool writing I can defiantly feel the anger within this
good work

[Sherbs Dreaming Tree Of..]

I really like this
Like a lot
Wow
Keep writing like this!
Check out some of my work its very similar :)