Different

Take a sip of that cup.
Watchout, monster monster.
You never figured, but that monster
Would actually go like: "S'up."
Swallow it up.
Tear up that poster.
It's time you've moved on.
Because my job here is done.
Pull yourself outta that hole.
Stop hiding like a mole.
I've got the word "Regret." scraped in my skin.
I hopelessly stood still carrying that sin.
I've built all that upon myself.
I was supposed to break that shelf.
Life's not worth not one frown.
Flashes, I recall.
Make me drown.
I can see, it's my turn to fall.

Author's Note

I've messed this up, but I think a part of it is worth reading.
Review please.

Reviews

[Emily B]

yes, oh yes

[Marilu Elizabeth]

beautiful. very nice writing.

[Mauricio Montoya]

Can’t mess up, you write what comes to heart and that’s what poetry is all about. We all have our own styles that make us different; the beauty of poetry is in the eyes of the reader. So keep on writing.

[PaperDoll]

This is good. I like it. Keep up the good work.

[mamabear]

I really enjoyed reading this. Well done.

Love

Mamabear x

[Angela Mulley]

I like the rhyming in this. Well done!

[Geralyn Miller]

I read your poem several times, it is almost as if you melded two works, one a warning, the other filled with regret. I like it, it is similar to exploring a crowded unfamilar place by the flashes of light from the lightning storm; a strobe effect.

[imm's place]

I think there is a lot of depth in your wording and there are several meanings and messages that flow through read it twice, mary

[George Love]

Interesting how this one turned, and how it turned out as well. Nicely done. You may tweak it or add a few lines, but I would not delete anything.

[Marie Harrison]

I think it's really good. Shows great strength and lots of imagination.