I Want It

Random thoughts.

Turn, turn, turn around.
Look for it till it's found.
Stop for a second.
Disappear into thin air.
Pretty unfair?
Gather yourself up.
Yes, I'll boss you around.
Till you make sure it's found.
Wave that flag.
Unpack your bag.
Show me whatcha got.
Let the flames boil up that pot.
Turn that cube into a sphere.
Make sure what I want is here.
Yes, I'll f*****g boss you around.
Till you f*****g make sure it's found.

Author's Note

Review please.

Reviews

[Mauricio Montoya]

geting those feelings out is what poetry is all about you've done a great job here. keep on writing.

[PaperDoll]

This is excellent. The speaker of the poem has a definite voice, and we never know what "it" is that has to be found. Good work.

[Tomi]

that's my boss there!

[Marie Harrison]

I agree with Coyote Poetry, it does remind me of boot camp. I've never been to boot camp, but if I were to go, this is what it would be like I think. I like it!

[Coyote Poetry]

Your words remind me of the army boot camp. They would make you feel strong and confident if they had to beat it in. A interesting poem. I like it.
Coyote

[George Love]

At first I thought this might work as song lyrics, then the last two lines entered and blew that thought away. Not bad, but there's better work in you yet to come out.

[T. J. Blackburn]

lol. "second" & "up" seem out of place since they are not part of a rhyming set. But I enjoyed this piece.

[James Paulin]

I feel violence on two sides. It may be external or internal but it really doesn't matter because violence occurs in both circumstances. I like this type of poem with subjectively broad applications. It could be political, social or personal and yet it is venomous. I think the form and verbiage are well crafted as well.

[Deviant Works]

Wow! I really liked this piece. Makes me thinks of life in general. Especially the last three lines. The rhyming was excellently done, as rhyming is hard for many writers. Wonderful read, love the realness.

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This sounds like me when I lose something :P
I like it a lot ^_^