History repeats it self time by time, Sometimes its you, sometimes its me we walk we crawl We laugh We cry, But never forget inside, who are we. Intentions were rock Ambitions were sky Always in you, always in me Its time to say YES, History is repeating it self Yesterday it was in you today its in me
This is a nice poem...and will be a better one if you also use punctuation marks to separate different ideas in a line like in the 3rd, 5th and last lines. Mr Richard was right, itself should be one word, it's should be used in the 2nd and 7th lines.
Keep writing. :)
Hi, history repeats itself from time to time....The use grammar and idioms are difficult to master. They are like the techniques and the use of herbs and spices in cooking... a meal without them is bland, with too many ... a meal is drowned.... with the wrong ones, bought without thought and added randomly... a wierd and unfamiliar taste but... with a perfect balance and carefully added.... well...... perfection.... the spirits of the kitchen dance on your tongue. It is the same with the preparation of a poem, a song or a story...
I love the images of intentions and ambitions.
it self.... itself, who are we.... who we are... its.... it's (it is) me. I hope this was useful?
Posted 11 Years Ago
11 Years Ago
Thanks a lot Richard.. I am a new writer and this review is like feedback of a master!!! I take it a.. read moreThanks a lot Richard.. I am a new writer and this review is like feedback of a master!!! I take it as a blessing an will improve on writing!!!
11 Years Ago
I am always happy to help. I love words and language. I appreciate all forms of communication and ap.. read moreI am always happy to help. I love words and language. I appreciate all forms of communication and appreciate anyone who wants to talk, write, sing, dance or ... share a meal. If we all did it .... Peace.