You and Me

You and Me

A Poem by Hiral

History repeats it self time by time,
Sometimes its you, sometimes its me
we walk we crawl We laugh We cry, 
But never forget inside, who are we.
Intentions were rock Ambitions were sky
Always in you, always in me
Its time to say YES, History is repeating it self
Yesterday it was in you today its in me

© 2013 Hiral


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Nice.. Keep it up.. Do u read mine 2 "ANGUISH" If possible then gives ur review..tc

Posted 11 Years Ago


Very well written write,
Like the thoughts behind this write

Posted 11 Years Ago


This is a nice poem...and will be a better one if you also use punctuation marks to separate different ideas in a line like in the 3rd, 5th and last lines. Mr Richard was right, itself should be one word, it's should be used in the 2nd and 7th lines.
Keep writing. :)

Posted 11 Years Ago


Hi, history repeats itself from time to time....The use grammar and idioms are difficult to master. They are like the techniques and the use of herbs and spices in cooking... a meal without them is bland, with too many ... a meal is drowned.... with the wrong ones, bought without thought and added randomly... a wierd and unfamiliar taste but... with a perfect balance and carefully added.... well...... perfection.... the spirits of the kitchen dance on your tongue. It is the same with the preparation of a poem, a song or a story...
I love the images of intentions and ambitions.
it self.... itself, who are we.... who we are... its.... it's (it is) me. I hope this was useful?

Posted 11 Years Ago


Hiral

11 Years Ago

Thanks a lot Richard.. I am a new writer and this review is like feedback of a master!!! I take it a.. read more
Richard Man

11 Years Ago

I am always happy to help. I love words and language. I appreciate all forms of communication and ap.. read more

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Added on April 29, 2013
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Hiral
Hiral

Ahmedabad, Gujarat, India



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