Someone

Someone asked me about my peace
I showed them my past where you were with me
Someone asked me about my joy
I showed them my smile when i used to see you
Someone asked me about my happiness
I showed them my cheery red face in your palms
Someone asked me about my life
I showed them the days i spent with you
Someone asked me about my present
I showed them the silence in that graveyard

Reviews

[Just Kim]

Very touching read, enjoyed

[Saumya]

tis is soooooooooooooooo sweeeeeeeeeeeeeet, lovely and touching....!!! i just loved it!!!!!!! hats off!! well done dear!!!!!

[Prritiy]

Its a touching write, made my eyes watery.
best wishes

[Hiral]

You made my poem priceless!! thank you priti

[Prritiy]

welcome :)

[Surbhi Khandelwal]

Keep writing :)

[Hiral]

Thanks for review surbhi

[Imara]

All "I" should be capitalized. Remember punctuation because that's how you tell the reader how to read your poem. It can really add a lot.

This is a very touching poem, I get the feeling its about a now deceased mother, father or another relative. Talking about your past those joyous day then making it specific to when you were with that person really adds to it. Makes me feel how much you loved that person. Great write, keep up the good work :)

[Hiral]

Thanks Imara

[Talal Hussain]

Thats such a wonderful composition Hiral...really like your work :-)

[Hiral]

Thanks Talal , for your wonderful motivational comment!!!!