Bogus

Thought I liked to like you,

That I’d die if I see you go.

 

 

 

Felt so much joy the first day,

 

 

Then you took my breath away.

 

 

 

 

 

Splash of the new tune was there,

 

 

Like a perched scarlet feather.

 

 

 

 

 

Truly, love was in our hearts,

 

 

And nothing could break us apart.

 

 

 

 

 

Then, rains started to intervene,

 

 

So weak, we’re blown by the wind.

 

 

 

 

 

We swore to hold on so tight,

 

 

Coz’ we knew it might be right.

 

 

 

 

 

But, like a child that’s so gullible,

 

 

We didn’t anticipate for the impossible.

 

 

 

 

 

Now, we ruined everything laid,

 

 

And we broke the things we said.

 

 

 

 

 

Who’s to blame with the fall?

 

 

When no one wanted the ball.

 

 

 

 

 

We’re so wrong with what we expect,

 

 

Though, the remorse came indirect.

 

 

 

 

 

We failed to make the love’s purpose,

 

 

Coz’ what we felt was just bogus.

Reviews

[Gandré]

Splash of the new tune was there,






Like a perched scarlet feather.---------- Iliked so much this metaphor. Wonderful way to say. I enjoyed your poem and thank you for submitting it to my contest. you created a range of emotions, romance and good feeling in me, glad you posted and submitted.

[indu]

the truth!! :/

[Tovli]

another awesome piece. there is such a strong sense of spontaneity in this poem. thanks for including it. tovli

[Salvatore Buttaci]

Congratulations on winning the Baroque-Sonnet contest!

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We all feel that the person we meet for the first time and have a great deal of conversation and 'some' physical contacts to be the one .. but later on we can deceived when we realise we were wrong .. and there's also a touch of pain in this write in the sense that all your dreams and all that you thought of got shattered. But i guess it's not true love, most people of our age do not experience true love, as we are simply in quest of it, so for me it's just infatuation .. only someone who has gone through a heart break that can give true love, because he really knows the meaning of love..
Well done!

[Davlin]

You portrayed a youth's mistake of love for infatuation in an honest way that I haven't seen before. This piece really spoke to me, but I guess everyone is going to experience this at some point. That's the best thing about this one, everyone can relate. Keep it up.

[Gandré]

you have soo much potential. Talented writer - I loved this.

[Hopesunderground]

Amen.
Love sucks.