MAKE YOU MINE

This poem is partly special because i wrote it the night i got dumped. This poem has something that is me, that's why i really consider it to be close to me.

When you think everything is over
No mo remorse, no more things to hover
you could see my eyes with gentility
and i will bring you to what is verity.

Life is unfair as it haunted your soul
It made a cul de sac to take your all
No, don't look like you know I am in vehemence
Because everyday you are my self-contentment.

Forsooth, you came, saw and conquer
The truth, you're in gripe; you don't know hot to spur
Abandon things and live life with me
We'll go somewhere and live life happily.

Ex parte love, I'm proud to say that
Obsession with you!, I will never regret that
For love comes once in a life time
i gotta do everything to make you mine.

Reviews

[Tovli]

a beautiful poem--right from the soul. thank you for sharing it. tovli

[Eidolon Michael]

Wow, that was amazing. I can really tell you were writing from your heart when I read this. I like it ^_^

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It's amazing how you wrote that after being dumped .. mine would be something of revenge or hatred, but here you showed that your love was pure, maybe that's why you still hope for that person to come back to you so that you can make her yours...
However, i was slowed down by the second line of the first stanza, did you put 'mo' intently, or is it a mistake for 'more'?
Well penned!

[APoetsMuse]

Well wrtitten. very descriptive. nice job!