Throwing Roses

Every time I see you smile
It's not because of me.
We've travelled such a distance
Only for you to want to be free.
It's not like it used to be
You're throwing roses at the ground.
And I thought I heard you whisper
When no one was around.

The simple things just seem so hard to find...
Telling you "I love you" is now just crossing the line,
since you're not mine.
Who knew that life could offer gold and take it away,
the same day...
Sorry doesn't matter
When your heart's already run away
I'll be throwing roses
At the floor for the rest of the day.

Is it really so easy to say goodbye?
Is it really so hard to tell me why?
I don't think it's easy to say goodbye.
I just wish you'd tell me why...

Yeah I know it's been a while since we've agreed.
Stubborn minds are so useless.
And when we both know we are diseased,
The way to the cure turns out so ruthless

But maybe in dear time
Our paths will cross again.
It's so unfortunate that
We cannot even be friends.
But if there's a sickness
You know the remedy can be found
I can wait forever
Throwing roses at the ground.

Reviews

[melancholia skies]

I'm not quite sure why you wanted to me see it. I read it earlier. >_>;
What is it you want me to say?
Sure, the poem or song, whatever, is beautiful. The flow is creative and the words are used outstandingly to express your emotions with a high level of effectiveness. The rhyming sheme was great. I do say a warning to Leah, though. All the critiqueing focused on this peom should be focused on your own manufactoring ability. =/. Aswell I do add, there are no rules in poetry/song writing, there are only possibilities, ideas, creativity, emotion, persperation, pens, and paper.

[Caleb]

Aye f**k you Leah, go suck a dick.
That s**t was epic and you tried to tear it down.
You're a f*****g terrorist.


Kick-A*s Shane, I loved it.

[Xfaerie corpseX]

i like it a lot....ok...i love it.

and, i personally don't beleve a poem is all about how it sounds...and i thought it sounded great.

and i loved it just because it mentioned roses. i mean...thats not y i loved it...it just made me.... idk...i like roses and im going to shut up now.


VERY NICE
u deserve a wand of your own...maybe even with glitter on it lol

[Life Inside Death]

this is a song which i can read perfectly out loud
i guess you just cant find the beat
i also believe its a shame that you cannot deem my work as "good"..how arrogant
lets see you do better (to Leah)

[Leah Elisabeth]

This is a good poem content-wise, but I think your flow was a little off. It doesn't read well out loud and a good poem should have a natural cadence to it. Also your rhyme scheme and meter kept changing. Now, I am not one to stick religiously to the rules, but it is very imprtant how a poem sounds. I think you have some good ideas and you show a lot of promise but I really think you would benefit from reading your poems out loud and figuring out how to make them flow.

[W. Lynch]

Wow, it was really good. It flowed really easily, and "Throwing roses at the ground" just sounds so bittersweet. :]