Throwing Roses

Every time I see you smile
It's not because of me.
We've travelled such a distance
Only for you to want to be free.
It's not like it used to be
You're throwing roses at the ground.
And I thought I heard you whisper
When no one was around.

The simple things just seem so hard to find...
Telling you "I love you" is now just crossing the line,
since you're not mine.
Who knew that life could offer gold and take it away,
the same day...
Sorry doesn't matter
When your heart's already run away
I'll be throwing roses
At the floor for the rest of the day.

Is it really so easy to say goodbye?
Is it really so hard to tell me why?
I don't think it's easy to say goodbye.
I just wish you'd tell me why...

Yeah I know it's been a while since we've agreed.
Stubborn minds are so useless.
And when we both know we are diseased,
The way to the cure turns out so ruthless

But maybe in dear time
Our paths will cross again.
It's so unfortunate that
We cannot even be friends.
But if there's a sickness
You know the remedy can be found
I can wait forever
Throwing roses at the ground.

Reviews

[melancholia skies]

I'm not quite sure why you wanted to me see it. I read it earlier. >_>;
What is it you want me to say?
Sure, the poem or song, whatever, is beautiful. The flow is creative and the words are used outstandingly to express your emotions with a high level of effectiveness. The rhyming sheme was great. I do say a warning to Leah, though. All the critiqueing focused on this peom should be focused on your own manufactoring ability. =/. Aswell I do add, there are no rules in poetry/song writing, there are only possibilities, ideas, creativity, emotion, persperation, pens, and paper.

[Marisa!(:]

Wow! Right now Im spechless. THis is amazing. Tears filled my eyes as I read this. And I... I feel the pain, deep down inside. I LOVE it!

[Nae Nae]

This is beautiful ...Not only does it flow so well but it's honest and pure emotion.
Every once and a while you come across a piece of art that really speaks to you, in a true and honest way, so deeply that it sticks with you forever and you know right away that it's important to you. This is one of those pieces, so deep and so passionate that I can't even begin to describe it's emense conformity. I am in love with this piece ...Thank you for posting it.

Nae-Nae ...

[CircusNerd]

the rhyme scheme is different, but switching between the patterns gives is a rawer beauty that a steady and chosen rhyme scheme probably would not illustrate. the choice of words is simple but fiery and ardent, and the diction and flow and is immaculate :) love it :)

[Akina]

so sweet and cute poem, love it!
it got a really nice flow and I just love that it's so emotional.
good job

Akina

[Adeline]

this is really good, I like it a lot. It sounds like it could be a song, have you ever tried writing songs? You should. Nice job, keep it up! :D

[nostal]

Nice.

[Sarah]

LOVE this. :) Very romantic. Nice use of repetition and rhyme. Great job, as usual!!! (=

[Mistral Bilgera]

sooo melodic and angsty! reasons why i love this poem:

1. mixed elements of passion: of love and hate, roses and disease, freedom and possession. (do u get it?)

2.Its melodic! is this a song?

3. the hope mentioned in the end of the poem. You can possibly tell the attitude of an author towards anything just by looking at his/her works' ending, doesnt matter how dark/happy/sappy the developing parts are...


4. because when it's written by Shane Hatfield, i know it rawkkks. :D

[Captain Ugly]

There's no anger like heart-broken anger. I liked it. I bet it can be read out loud. OUT LOUD!!! The way pain sounds.

These lines are great:

"And when we both know we are diseased,
The way to the cure turns out so ruthless"

Just Me.
Captain Ugly