War

We march through mud and rain

We see the prize ahead

We will not die this way

That's what our fathers said...

 

Take me out now

And run away

You won't find peace here

Peace is so far away...

 

If I ever, If I ever

Ever tell you there's no whenever

Run away, Run away

From the ghost that's haunting me

 

The battle wages

We fight in cages

Our limbs so weak from strain

I fall to pieces here

I can't find peace in here

My body shivers in the rain

 

My legs so cold

The bullet's burn is soothing

The hellfire feels so good now

Sometimes I smile while losing...

 

Taste the burning embers

Our flesh torn to shreds

Raping ourselves for fortune

Lifeless talking heads

 

I won't be coming home tonight

My friends and I have seen the light

We'll sleep tight

We'll be alright

And see you on the other side.

 

Author's Note

might add more later..i dunno..

Reviews

[Wendy in Realityland]

Wow the rhythm and flow are great.. refreshing to read an actual by the book poem, although i hate war, it's inevitable i suppose...

[Mistral Bilgera]

Brilliant! Modern Randall Jarrell!

[melancholia skies]

Great job. Reminds me of 'Ready, Set, Go' by Tokio Hotel.
:D
Which of course is a good thing. :)
Flow with the stanzas were well put together.

[Sarah]

Very nicely written. The occasional rhyme was a nice touch, and I adored the repetition in the third stanza. Excellent! :)

[Legion]

Interesting piece. Kind of a walking dead moment. I like it. Good flow as well. Excellent.