Unknown Jesus

 

Looking down on you

All I can do is smile

When you’re happy, I’m happy

Even just for a while

 

But watching you

From this cross built in the sky

I can’t help but wonder

Why did I have to die?

 

To be so attached to someone

It was so surreal

To think I’d sacrifice myself

Because of what others feel

 

And until I died

You never knew I cared

The whole time I protected you

I did what no one dared

 

And so I’m hanging…

This crucifix pins me

To the days where I used to laugh

The days I used to cry

 

You’re nothing but a dream now

A dream I’ll never wake up from

And as my hands bleed for your happiness

I stay looking at you, hoping you noticed me

 

 Even if you had no God

I’m the one you can call a “savior”

I’ll be the one who drags you

Back into the light

I’m your destiny

I’m the Unknown Jesus.

Author's Note

sorry if i offended anyone

Reviews

[Dani California]

I don't find this offensive at all.
I find it inspiring...

"And until I died
You never knew I cared
The whole time I protected you
I did what no one dared..."

What is great about this piece
is the show of love and sacrifice for
in the name of love... a love for
mankind that even mankind doesn't
have for themselves. This inspires
regardless to one's beliefs.

Spiritually, I think we've all got so
much to learn -- we truly are
kindergarteners when it comes
to comprehension of our spiritual
self.. love.. faith...truth.

This is a wonderful piece!

Thank you for sharing it! :)

[Pointblank]

Wow. I would have never thought of writing something from his point of view! Very clever. You have good insight. Dont we wish we could really hear from him? He probably feels exactly what you have expressed here. Brilliant. Just plain Brilliant.

[Rachel DeHart]

"The whole time I protected you
I did what no one dared"

I like this poem a lot. My friend writes a lot of religious poetry, and I enjoyed the kinda of twist you put on this one.

Plus those two lines are amazing.
:]

[.:DelicateAdelle:.]

Ohh... I'mma not a proper religion witness, so I can't really relate...
It was good though. :)
You seem like a cool guy, who obvious has a special girl. ;)

God, I wish I had I guy who would say things like that about me...
Great write, Life Inside Death. :)

[youngwriter222]

This is a great poem about how God sacrificed his life for ours.
I don't think is is offending, its a great thought provoking poem.

[Mistral Bilgera]

hey buddy, this is so brave!... I am a Christian and I'm faithful, but i am open to other idealisms. i love how you have written this masterpiece from the point of view of an unrequited-loving Jesus, with the dominating emotions of his "human", rather than his "godly" side. Kudos! =)

[Sarah]

I don't think this is offending at all. :D It's really beautiful and captures the more human side of Jesus that a lot of people don't mention. He was a man, after all, and probably did love someone & feel sad for leaving them when he died. ;-; I liked this, it was really original! Great job! Cookie? ^___^;

[Sam]

I admire your bravery for almost depicting yourself as Jesus in this way, which is obviously going to cause a degree of uproar. The poem itself is romantic, in a detached sense, which is a concept I find interesting. You draw attention to the issues of love and loss well, and the latent insecurity that accompanies these feelings.

[Wendy in Realityland]

I agree with V. This should be something that any religious person should be more to understanding and belief rather thananger and frustration. For the reasons we know Jesus did what he did, and for the reasons we don't, he left that for us to decide. This is a very good conclusion, i agree with it ^_^. Again, as always, awesome Shane.

[Life Inside Death]

When I wrote this I knew I'd get some heated ratings, but I didn't in any way mean to anger anyone. For those who were confused, such as Rachel D, I was writing in the viewpoint of a type of Jesus who died for somebody I loved and was protecting her even after death. Once again to any believers of God and Jesus Christ I apologize for portraying myself this way, and I want to thank the others for supporting me in this no doubt provocative piece of writing.