I wouldn't worry if it wasn't for that thing.....That thing that follows us all, even though we don't realize it. Don't worry anymore. This is more of a rant then anything....
Why me?
Does that mean I get a prize? Yes.
The prize is heartbreak, worry, depression.
It sounds so wonderful, doesn't it? Why bother with it if it brings us so much pain, so much suffering, so many sleepless nights, so much blood? Why can't we just banish it to the pits of hell?! Why must it lurk at every corner, in every nook and cranny? Why must it always be there, to bring you pain and tears? Why does it bring such joy and longing? Why does it cause me to smile every time I get near you, or hear your name? Why does a simple four letter word raise so many questions, questions that can never be answered?
hi, errm reading your peom gaveme a thought, errm you should really try enjamberment and to space out your work, read -two scavengers in a truck, two beautiful people in a mercades_ its a really could poem, im your is to but there needs to be some improvement in the way of writing and layout rather then your actual writing. just keep it up, is a great piece but need some layout improvment! well its just my opinion! however i really like this part ;
Why does a simple four letter word raise so many questions, questions that can never be answered?
i love how the entire thing is in question form but the title implies that the poem is an answer. it makes you really think. However, it did seem a little scatterbrained. work on your placing and where you put things, also, how you word the questions.
It's interesting, a little scrambled and chaotic though. the recurring questions are a nice touch. I'd do away with the font and color however make it a little less bold and a little more wispy. Nice job though for your first poem/rant thing. :]
hi, errm reading your peom gaveme a thought, errm you should really try enjamberment and to space out your work, read -two scavengers in a truck, two beautiful people in a mercades_ its a really could poem, im your is to but there needs to be some improvement in the way of writing and layout rather then your actual writing. just keep it up, is a great piece but need some layout improvment! well its just my opinion! however i really like this part ;
Why does a simple four letter word raise so many questions, questions that can never be answered?