Golden Goodbye

Golden Goodbye

A Poem by Hey.MeAgain.
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An age has passed, the years were merciless Scarring the hills with wrinkles around their eyes. But the grass was still ochre the trees were still green. He was still on his knees..

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They stood on that golden moor, holding hands
The warm breeze whispered secrets in their ears, until
the silence got too loud for them to hear it.
The long stretches of shadows held telltale hints
of the approaching evening.

I should go, she says. Breaking the silence.
Little did she know, also his heart.

He watched her vanish behind the line of horizon that
was becoming a little unclear.
As he asked himself - 
Why had I let her go ?
He stared after the empty space, where he had last glimpsed her
his heart shattered into irreplaceble pieces,
like a pristine slide of glass.
As he wondered to himself -
Why had he let go ?

An age has passed, the years were merciless
Scarring the hills with wrinkles around their eyes.
But the grass was still ochre
the trees were still green.
He was still on his knees, where she had left him
Like a statue of unending love. Awaiting.

© 2010 Hey.MeAgain.


Author's Note

Hey.MeAgain.
Please critique this? My first attempt at a poem longer than 5 lines so it's probably pretty shabby. Your opinions? (:

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hey hey--this is a great piece of surrealist-naturism
overflowing will grandiose description-and you could
feel the desperation blowing through every sentence
of this opulent poem-and then dysphoria in the ending

A Magnificent piece of poetry!!!

james:-)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Pretty nice job. I like it nice job!

Posted 14 Years Ago


this was a very heartfelt poem i loved it very much and hope to see more keep up the good work

Posted 14 Years Ago


hey hey--this is a great piece of surrealist-naturism
overflowing will grandiose description-and you could
feel the desperation blowing through every sentence
of this opulent poem-and then dysphoria in the ending

A Magnificent piece of poetry!!!

james:-)

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on July 28, 2010
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Hey.MeAgain.
Hey.MeAgain.

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I fail at about me's, so posting some of the awesome poems I've read here seems like a better idea. - "Oh, how lonely this heart is! Just do this, nothing else: come close, lift my heart's fac.. more..

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