To My New Love...

This is somewhat self-explanatory.

Learning to love you
As we walk hand in hand
I'm rewarded by everything
I've come to understand

I feel made to enfold you
As your eyes proffer your soul
In every way so enticing
But I must learn to lose control

Feeling so weightless
It's easy to grasp at thin air
You can work yourself to frenzy
Worrying how someone might care

When the truth is
It's only YOUR OWN feelings
You need to understand
Not your love's revealings

Honesty is honestly
All you have to share
For you can never love something
Of which you're unaware

Author's Note

Go easy because this is actually personal...All the same, if you get where I am coming from then please don't hold back.

Reviews

[s y e]

// Honesty is honestly
All you have to share
For you can never love something
Of which you're unaware //

I loved the above (last) stanza, you really hit the jackpot with this one. Your little dream has become reality and it's all happening. A beautiful, heart touching piece that can be dedicated to anyone's love. (: Really loved this one.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Wow, I am really complimented by your reaction! This is what I think is great about love poetry: as you say, it is relatively universal, but it can also be tailored and specified to be unique. In this case my new girlfriend really does inhabit the words of this poem. She has certain specific things about her it is hard for me to get used to, which is why learning is the appropriate term for it, but it is definitely love and there is so much synchronicity. I almost can't believe it. I really like that I can know all these things and see the specific connections, and yet still this poem can stand on it's own as art too! Thank you for giving me that perspective! I was not sure about the ending when I wrote it. I am glad you liked it and validated my reason for adding it. I do think it is a subtler point about love that people too often forget: You can't just love reactively; you must love with YOUR heart. Some people love like playing a part to just be complimentary to the other person, but in my opinion that kind of love is always a lesser form and always fails. True love is feeling your own heart and fearlessly acting on your own feelings, cultivating them and not letting go of any of the fruits of your love without sharing them.

[The Representative]

True poetry. Full of conviction.

[Tina Louise UK]

Such a heartfelt beautiful piece...wonderfully done :) x

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Much thanks, Tia. I like to put some particular character into the love poems I write, you know? This is something I was really experiencing, but I also love the difference between this poem and others I read with regard to the characteristics it brings out of a particular specific love story.

[emmajoy]

' Honesty is honestly ~ All you have to share ~ For you can never love something ~ Of which you're unaware' ... in that last stanza you state your dream come true. Sweet words laid so well; personal, yes, yet another person less able to write might feel just like you and, poet, you've generously left a gift.. kindness and love remains in a finely wrapped packet of words.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Thanks so much, Emma! That was a soft spot in my poem I was kind of worried about. I appreciate the reassurance of your understanding. I think love must be based on truth or it will inevitably crumble. It is so obvious you are loving a lie you created when you can't share everything with the one you are with.

[SpeedyHobbit Armstrong]

This is a very sweet ode for the man or woman who has your heart. My one suggestion is in regards to the line " I feel made to enfold you". "I'm made to enfold you" shows a lot more conviction. Alternatively, "I've been made to enfold you" exudes a sense of purpose and suggests a lack of control over the overwhelming emotions

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

I really like your ideas in regards to conviction, and that is precisely the sort of detailed observation I appreciate! I may well change it, but since she has seen it, I may want to share it with her more before I change it...She is actually quite a natural poet herself!

[Rachelle]

Bro, I wish you all the happiness!

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Thank you, darling Rachelle!! I feel like I HAVE all the happiness right now!!!