Forcing It

A short and tossed off little piece I liked the feel of...

The present vague
My future weak
A past of which
I'll never speak

I came to you
Hat in hand
Hoping that you'd
Understand

Begging for
Another chance
Bellicose goading
For rollicking romance

Blustering wild
I wickedly charmed
Swearing oaths
You'd not be harmed

With you I sheltered
From the storm
And emerged in more
Enlightened form

The promises I
Could never keep
I've made them true
By your faith's leap

You took me in
Completed me
And by your hand
I was set free

Author's Note

This has a flow I like. What I am interested in is what it means to people. I didn't write it thinking "this is what I am going to say." Instead I deliberately allowed myself to just "go with the flow" and let the writing take over it's own direction. If it seems inconsistent, tell me. Also, I want to know all the creative meanings you can muster. The character in the poem who is narrating is not me. As usual, I like to take a slightly different persona and elaborate on it like a character I am playing.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i think she set the speaker free from his past...i related...after years of sheltering my heart, i found someone who let me be me...and i gradually emerged, putting my heart in her hand...and asking her to trust me...she also had trust issues...it worked for awhile...but that past can really pester.

i so much liked this because i felt it deep in my bones...you wrote me.

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Jacob, it is always an unexpected pleasure when I can move someone whose writing I am as find of as yours!! I find myself struggling sometimes to make sense of a certain situation in life. Then if I am lucky I can find a way to express it like in this poem. It sounds like you have experienced a similar thing to me, and I am glad to be able to share this real human emotion with you! I love when I feel myself coming back after a wounded heart!

[Baby Ricochet]

Good rhymes and flow here. Good work sir!

[Robert Tusitala O'Neill]

Thank you very much! That is something I am always seeking to improve on...