YAY FOR TEAMWORK!

umm...yeah...

SMILE pretty, girl. Go ahead, LIE to their faces. HIDE your shame, FAKE your happiness. oh yeah, you're real GOOD at that. tell them there's NOTHING WRONG, then flit around and SING. let them LISTEN to your pretty voice...cause they'll never hear you SCREAM. you always show them what they want to SEE. a happy You and not a gloomy Me. I come out at NIGHT, away from their IGNORANT eyes. i BREAK your skin and make you BLEED. i UPSET you in the morning when you remember the SCARS. but don't i make you HAPPY? don't you FEEL better when i'm THRU? don't you ENJOY the satisfying, watermelon-scented STING of a job well DONE? and the RED still RUNNING after in the sink TURNING BROWN, that makes you SMILE doesn't it? you and me SWEET HEART, are a PERFECT match. yet you take ME for granted...LYING to all your FRIENDS and FAMILY...though you don't always SLIP by. lately you've let me come OUT in the DAYLIGHT. and i've been ENJOYING it...making people PITY me it much fun to do. it also makes you TURN to ME, when it all becomes too MUCH. you CRY on my shoulder and let me CUT. your SKIN so pretty and SOFT. and when it's over with you SLEEP on TEAR-stained PILLOW. waking in bright SUNSHINE to face the PEOPLE. they get ANGRY and they FUSS. they get SAD and give you PITY. then i come out to PROTECT you. i DRINK it all in. SEE sweet heart? we're one fucked up TEAM.

Reviews

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Wow, I dont know if shes in a abuse relationship or if is the blood talking to her. Either ways you need to brake it up a little for the reader, it makes it a lot eassier to read and to understand. Other than that is a great piece.
I really thought she was in an abuse relationship in the beginging, but after the end im completely comfuce i dont know whats wrong with her or what just happen. I wanted to read it again but the way is layed out i just find it to hard to go back and read. I like to pick and choose which paragraphs are best and what parts i liked t read over and over again, but like i said with the way is layed out i cant and i wont read the whole thing again. Why did you picked the color purple? Not my favorite color but i guess it has a meaning behind the story, if it doesnt maybe you should stick to black.
Finally why teamwork? I dont know if the tittle or the end where she says go team has anything to do with the story you painted for the reader. Maybe im missing the whole point but thats why you need to make it a little more clear, maybe have some feedback on the very top explaining whats happening in this piece before the readers dives in and starts to read it.

Overall it was interesting and i enjoyed reading it, just clear up those points for me and i might be able to appreciate it a little more...
Thank you for the request and i hope to get new ones from you in the future, look forward to reading more.
I hope my review can be a helpfull...
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