I Walk Alone

A mist as cold as silver stones

settles in this broken road

the buildings seem to watch me pass,

staring at an unknown mass.

Ahead lies tales of misery

souls forgotten through the seeps

cracks scattered across the land

I walk alone searching for a lamb

His fleece as white as stars

no longer shining through the dark.

He is as pure as air

before the pollution poisoned and teared.

The steps I take, will one day fade,

along with this world,

oh such a devastating fate.

We all must watch as the clock ticks on

and one by one we fall into the ground

forgotten by everyone around.

But yet the hope lies within our hearts

so we must walk through the night

searching for the shining star.

Reviews

[B J Hughes]

A strong and convincing use of metaphor describing the promise of hope tempered with the possibie reality of failure.
"I walk alone searching for a lamb / His fleece as white as stars / no longer shining through the dark." - a most brilliant expression that could, on its own, stand as poetry!

[Ella]

Thank you so much for reviewing!It took me a while to write this. I'm so glad you understood what I was trying to say.

[B J Hughes]

You are welcome! :o)

[Curtis.Lenker]

Deep meaning here. Very beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.

[Ella]

Thank you very much!

[Ferdian]

Deep meaning, good perspective... like it

[Ella]

Thank you!

[samparks,sam]

oh great I will try to make star

[Ella]

Awesome glad to hear that!