I Walk Alone

A mist as cold as silver stones

settles in this broken road

the buildings seem to watch me pass,

staring at an unknown mass.

Ahead lies tales of misery

souls forgotten through the seeps

cracks scattered across the land

I walk alone searching for a lamb

His fleece as white as stars

no longer shining through the dark.

He is as pure as air

before the pollution poisoned and teared.

The steps I take, will one day fade,

along with this world,

oh such a devastating fate.

We all must watch as the clock ticks on

and one by one we fall into the ground

forgotten by everyone around.

But yet the hope lies within our hearts

so we must walk through the night

searching for the shining star.

Reviews

[B J Hughes]

A strong and convincing use of metaphor describing the promise of hope tempered with the possibie reality of failure.
"I walk alone searching for a lamb / His fleece as white as stars / no longer shining through the dark." - a most brilliant expression that could, on its own, stand as poetry!

[Ella]

Thank you so much for reviewing!It took me a while to write this. I'm so glad you understood what I was trying to say.

[B J Hughes]

You are welcome! :o)

[Just Kim]

Such an emotional read, enjoyed so much,
you write very well. Like your style.

[Ella]

Happy you enjoyed it and thank you! :)

[BlackPrince]

I really love your unique perspective on noticing the ills of society, the loneliness and sadness people live through.
This is good, because I believe that as writers we have a divine, since we are actually blessed with the power of words, to speak for the voiceless; with our advanced insight and foresight we must bear the light for the world to see. We are here to bring hope to the masses, yet we are not here to deceive or mislead them.
KEEP IT UP!
kEEP WRITING FROM THE SOUL
LISTEN TO YOUR INNER VOICE

[Ella]

I needed that so much! i have not written in a while but you really motivated me to start up again. Thank you so much for your kind words! :)

[conversations with her ..]

everything about this was amazing...


im stunned.

[Ella]

Thank you so much!

[Inject Positivity]

Life on earth lives by faith and that is how life forms and ends... The message of the poem is very beautiful and inspiring. As the poem says we must move on in this journey called life to find the stars we are looking to find... Beautifully done my frnd...

Sincerely
Dhiman

[Ella]

Thank you. Life is bittersweet. What we choose to do with it is up to us. thanks for the review!!

[Re-Pete]

As beautiful as it is true. 'But yet the hope lies within our hearts
so we must walk through the night
searching for the shining star.' - says it all.

[Ella]

Thank you :) glad you enjoyed it. Thanks for the review it always makes my day to receive one.

[Re-Pete]

that last stanza is words to live by. thank you.

[Dr. YumnaKay]

"The steps I take, will one day fade,
along with this world,
oh such a devastating fate.
We all must watch as the clock ticks on
and one by one we fall into the ground
forgotten by everyone around." So true.. It seems so unbelieveable that though we may deem ourselves as important, one day we will be forgotten as if we never existed.. This is an excellent piece.. I liked reading this...

[Ella]

Thank you so much for the review! Glad you enjoyed this :)

[Dr. YumnaKay]

You are welcome! It was a pleasure ☺

[Robert]

I am sorry Ella, that I have been away from WC for awhile. I have been on a tremendous writers block that I cannot shake. So I checked in today to visit some past friends, whom i admire their writing and this piece you so beautifully written did not let me down . I encourage you to keep writing as your work is such a smile upon me as I read it.

[Joey K]

Strong meaning and presented well. I love this line.

"The steps I take, will one day fade,"

That line really shares you're idea for the poem. Good job!

[unfathomd]

wow Ella! :D amazing! :D
"But yet the hope lies within our hearts
so we must walk through the night
searching for the shining star."
The poem begins with a pessimistic note.. really amazing the way u turned out this pessimism into optimism! :D indescribable id say :D