A Glimpse of the Moon (variation)

A Glimpse of the Moon (variation)

A Poem by Helenna
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The story of a star deeply and hopelessly in love with the moon.

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Like a dream, she glows,

Goddess of the night,

She waltzes slow,

In her gentle light.

 

Like a star at night,

I watch her from afar,

As she twirls and shines

In her silvery gown.

 

And I wonder if some night,

She’ll see me as right,

Me, a star with no name,

A star with no light.

© 2024 Helenna


Author's Note

Helenna
I added a stanza and changed a few lines. What do you think of it?

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I appreciated the rhyme scheme and how the poem flowed from first, second, and third stanzas. Then boom stanza 4 was unexpected; especially with the moon infatuation with the star. Then the star declares to not have light, which makes me wonder how that silvery mood shines- must be from another star. Yes, another tragedy.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helenna

4 Months Ago

Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it!

When I wrote it, I focused more on .. read more



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I like the night with a clear sky. When the moon can light us the night with such beauty. I have talk to the moon often by the sea. I like to watch the sun and the moon passing in the hours of dusk. I have wondered also. Can the moon hear us, can the moon see us? Thank you dear poet for sharing the amazing poetry for Luna.
Coyote

Posted 3 Weeks Ago


I appreciated the rhyme scheme and how the poem flowed from first, second, and third stanzas. Then boom stanza 4 was unexpected; especially with the moon infatuation with the star. Then the star declares to not have light, which makes me wonder how that silvery mood shines- must be from another star. Yes, another tragedy.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Helenna

4 Months Ago

Thanks for your feedback, I really appreciate it!

When I wrote it, I focused more on .. read more
This poem strikes me as strange. As the moon only reflects the light of its star... but this star is in love with its moon... a very tiny variation of its own reflection. And at base, both a member of the same primordial cloud of gas and dust that created each other in the first pkace. Reminds me of the Greek poem about narcissus (in love with reflection) and a little bit about incest. We are in love with ourselves... as a species, as an organism, etc..

That might be a strange take. I had a strange day today.

I love the writing though. It's good stuff.

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Helenna

4 Months Ago

I find it an interesting point of view. I confess that I hadn't really thought of it that way but it.. read more
Davidgeo

4 Months Ago

Stars don't have moons, they have planets. Our star seems to love our planet. Our moon however is.. read more
I wouldn't get my hopes up. I hear the moon's very picky. I mean, wouldn't you be , if people
had worshipped you for centuries?

Posted 4 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on July 31, 2024
Last Updated on July 31, 2024
Tags: moon, star, love, poetry, hopeless love


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