Paper Swans

fold upon fold

meditation and measure

 

a crease here, another there

ceremonial acts in

 

deliberate

 

            precision

 

releasing crinkles of

a crumpled mind

 

junk and filth spill out

 

only

 

beauty and freedom

remain

 

wings to fly

Reviews

[Jack...]

What lies within the folds of life, you my friend have unfolded this piece and allowed us all to see. Very nice.

[Helen Warner]

Thank you for taking the time to read.

[Temerity]

This is very simplistic, but it works to the poem's benefit. You've managed to go miles in only a few inches. Sometimes, the beauty is in its upfrontedness, and I admire that this poem puts it so plainly and yet still has the room for emotion and artistry. Keep writing, and best wishes!

[Helen Warner]

Thank you. This was my first attempt at minimalistic poetry. It was a fun write. I would like to do more.

[Sami Khalil]

A good poem...:)

[zainul]

I understand that you are a blessed with classical tradition of poetry.
Congratulations!!!

[Rogue]

Origami of the thoughts and mind. I like not just the wording here, but the way the piece has been constructed. You have a remarkable amount of talent. :)

[Criss ;)]

fold upon fold
meditation and measure
a crease here, another there
ceremonial acts in deliberate precision
well started...this startin''s good to read...nice poem. TITTLE's enough to tell everythn' about it that you've expressed here...beautiful piece...

well penned, 94.8/100
have a nice writin' :)
take care...!!

[Helen Warner]

Thank you for taking the time to read!