Beyond

Life beyond the eyes

On my bed

Just like the softness covered by a box

Box beneath the sand

Total darkness

Silence

But I am on the bed

About to have a taste 

Of the metaphor called sleep

Yes, beyond our thought

Beyond this words

Beyond where no one

Can return to tell us

"In this world, think inside the box"

Author's Note

Please, constructive feedback is deeply appreciated. Have not written over a decade!

Reviews

[emmajoygreen]

Twice lost my review!! Third time lucky - or not! Not!
If one thinks of the sleeping being needing a box in which to store one's dreams then you have found a way of being touched by something deep within self. Perhaps. Seems you can explain your own wondering, but, do you need someone else to confirm, I wonder,

'Yes, beyond our thought
Beyond this words
Beyond where no one
Can return to tell us
"In this world, think inside the box"

Seems your own thoughts, your own words - confirm your last few lines. The box is yours and yours alone.

[Mirror]

Very in sync! When one dies, it is your box-coffin, no else shares. Sleep is same as death. In our world today, Every one are forced to be selfish in their thoughts out of fear evil and unknown.

Yes, my own thoughts, my own words...rather safe don't you think?!.

I smiled while I typed this. You know, you're actually lucky this review wasn't lost! One day, everyone will dream, think, alone sleeping beyond the wake. The box, your only company.

[Betty Hermelee]

In my view, the word sleep is a way to let your mind go wild, not in the box, but somewhere way out there...because dreams are free and flighty and unworldly at times....I believe in thinking outside the box almost always because you must expand your mind to be able to understand complexities in this universe
Nice Write
Warmly, B

[Mirror]

Thank you for your kind review! You do think I can replace box with sleep? I have tried that and couldn't get it. But your review is encouraging!

[Betty Hermelee]

You’re very welcome
Warmly, B🌷